MY FATHER: Just turn left at the end of the alley instead of right . . . That’s it.
ME: Okay.
MY FATHER: Oh say. See this house here? Right where this cross-street ends? I’m nearly one-hundred-percent sure that it’s a government safe house.
ME: Oh lord Jesus.
MY FATHER: No, strike that. I’m one-hundred-percent sure it’s a government safe house.
ME: You really, really, really watch too much television.
MY FATHER: Why couldn’t it be a government safe house?
ME: Why should it be a government safe house?
MY FATHER: Just look at it. Just look.
ME: Which of the CSI shows put this notion into your head?
MY FATHER (hurt): They have to get the ideas for the CSI shows from somewhere.
ME: They aren’t getting them from the street behind your house.
MY FATHER: Look at those big SUVs parked in front of it. What do you think of that?
ME: I think the people who live there are fond of Ford Durangos.
MY FATHER: They’re big security vehicles with dark windows and they’re probably armored.
ME: Those windows aren’t dark! I can see right through them!
MY FATHER: They’re where the government safe house agents sit.
ME: Then why are they empty?
MY FATHER: They’re inside, guarding the occupants.
ME: I don’t think . . . oh god, this is making my head hurt.
MY FATHER: Think about it! This would be a perfect place to have a quick escape route when their cover is blown. All they’d have to do is hurry the people they’re protecting to the armored cars, then drive up Robin Hood Road to the on-ramp where they’d have access to both 64 or 95.
ME: Although there’s a certain weird logic to that, I really don’t think . . . Have you ever seen anyone going in or coming out?
MY FATHER: I saw a woman ‘going to work’ once.
ME: I can hear your air quotes. Was she wearing a dark jacket and slacks and a white shirt?
MY FATHER: Well, no, but. . . .
ME: Because that’s what the FBI would wear.
MY FATHER: That’s what they want you to think. You know nothing about the art of disguise.
ME: Oh, okay, Disguise Master. I’ve got an idea. Why don’t you go up to the front door and knock and ask if they’re a government safe house?
MY FATHER (with scorn): You think they’d say yes? You know nothing about how these things work.
ME: Do you really think the government would set up a safe house on Whitby that is so obvious that the nosy retired history professor with poor eyesight from around the corner would be able to identify it?
MY FATHER (loftily): I happen to be a very observant concerned neighbor.
Friday, June 2, 2017
Thursday, May 26, 2016
Conversations with My Father: Getting Nowhere Edition
MY FATHER: Now normally, to get to the Huguenot Bridge, what I do is to take Parham Road past where our old dentist’s office was—you remember Dr. Pryor, I really never have liked his replacement’s replacement since they moved offices out past where your old French horn teacher lived, right around the corner from that old pharmacy that was the only place I could get the indigestion tablets your mother liked—and then I turn onto River Road. . . .
ME: Wait, I’m confused. Are we driving out to the pharmacy? I thought we were going to the Huguenot Bridge.
MY FATHER: We are going to the Huguenot Bridge, after you turn onto River Road up here. I was talking about where the replacement dentist for the replacement for our original dentist moved, around the corner from the pharmacy where I got the. . . .
ME: Indigestion tablets, yes, I know.
MY FATHER: I still have several rolls of those tablets.
ME: Christ. Throw them out. What are they, twenty-five years old at this point? Thirty?
MY FATHER: They’re a nice memento.
ME: Indigestion pills are not a memento. God, you’re like those hoarders on TV.
MY FATHER: So up here, you’re going to pass first the hardware store where we got the paint for the dining room in 1986, then past where the donut place was that your mother liked when we first moved here even though they tore it down before we moved into our house—gosh, I hadn’t thought about that place for a long time—then we’ll drive by the University of Richmond, and then the Country Club where your mother staged that surprise protest when you were eight, and after we cross the bridge there should be some woods and then Riverside Drive, and then we’re going to look for Elm Street and turn onto Wayburn and then we’ll—
ME: I . . . I can’t. My synapses are melting. You need to slow down.
MY FATHER: What’s the matter?
ME: When I’m driving and I’m having to concentrate on traffic and directions, we need to cut down on the reminiscences and get down to some real directions.
MY FATHER: Real directions.
ME: Practical directions.
MY FATHER: Practical directions.
ME: Okay. We understand each other?
MY FATHER: I think we do.
ME: Okay. This is the bridge. I’m turning right. We’re getting onto the bridge. What’s the next thing we’re doing?
MY FATHER: Okay, we are going to be looking for a set of streets, perpendicular to this street.
ME: A set of streets perpendicular to this street.
MY FATHER: Correct. A set of perpendicular streets at which this street continues on, going both north and south, while the perpendicular streets, which are the ones we're looking for, cross the street we currently are on, easterly and westerly. That is, the perpendicular streets are going in both directions, but not the directions we currently are. . . .
ME: OH MY GOD. You are making my BRAIN ACHE.
MY FATHER: Am I being unclear? There will be a set of streets perpendicular to this one, easterly and wester. . . .
ME: You mean a FOUR-WAY INTERSECTION?
MY FATHER: Well yes, that’s one way of putting it.
ME: It’s the CORRECT way of putting it. Christ.
MY FATHER: Gawrsh. You’re cranky.
ME: What’s next?
MY FATHER: Well. . . .
ME: We are remembering to keep it exact. Keep it precise.
MY FATHER: Exact and precise.
ME: Right. So?
MY FATHER: Okay. There are four lanes ahead. You don't want to be in the far left one, because it makes you turn left, and you don't want to be in the next-to-left one, because that also makes you turn left—there are two left lanes and the traffic light makes you turn left in both of them—and you don't want to be in the next-to-the-next-to-the-left one, because then you have to go straight, so. . . .
ME: IN OTHER WORDS, YOU WANT ME TO TURN RIGHT.
MY FATHER: If you want to boil it down like that.
ME: Oh, I do. I DO WANT YOU TO BOIL IT DOWN.
MY FATHER: Fine, fine. I’ll keep it succinct.
ME: THANK YOU.
MY FATHER [after a pause]: You know you missed the turn back there, right?
ME: GODDAMMIT.
ME: Wait, I’m confused. Are we driving out to the pharmacy? I thought we were going to the Huguenot Bridge.
MY FATHER: We are going to the Huguenot Bridge, after you turn onto River Road up here. I was talking about where the replacement dentist for the replacement for our original dentist moved, around the corner from the pharmacy where I got the. . . .
ME: Indigestion tablets, yes, I know.
MY FATHER: I still have several rolls of those tablets.
ME: Christ. Throw them out. What are they, twenty-five years old at this point? Thirty?
MY FATHER: They’re a nice memento.
ME: Indigestion pills are not a memento. God, you’re like those hoarders on TV.
MY FATHER: So up here, you’re going to pass first the hardware store where we got the paint for the dining room in 1986, then past where the donut place was that your mother liked when we first moved here even though they tore it down before we moved into our house—gosh, I hadn’t thought about that place for a long time—then we’ll drive by the University of Richmond, and then the Country Club where your mother staged that surprise protest when you were eight, and after we cross the bridge there should be some woods and then Riverside Drive, and then we’re going to look for Elm Street and turn onto Wayburn and then we’ll—
ME: I . . . I can’t. My synapses are melting. You need to slow down.
MY FATHER: What’s the matter?
ME: When I’m driving and I’m having to concentrate on traffic and directions, we need to cut down on the reminiscences and get down to some real directions.
MY FATHER: Real directions.
ME: Practical directions.
MY FATHER: Practical directions.
ME: Okay. We understand each other?
MY FATHER: I think we do.
ME: Okay. This is the bridge. I’m turning right. We’re getting onto the bridge. What’s the next thing we’re doing?
MY FATHER: Okay, we are going to be looking for a set of streets, perpendicular to this street.
ME: A set of streets perpendicular to this street.
MY FATHER: Correct. A set of perpendicular streets at which this street continues on, going both north and south, while the perpendicular streets, which are the ones we're looking for, cross the street we currently are on, easterly and westerly. That is, the perpendicular streets are going in both directions, but not the directions we currently are. . . .
ME: OH MY GOD. You are making my BRAIN ACHE.
MY FATHER: Am I being unclear? There will be a set of streets perpendicular to this one, easterly and wester. . . .
ME: You mean a FOUR-WAY INTERSECTION?
MY FATHER: Well yes, that’s one way of putting it.
ME: It’s the CORRECT way of putting it. Christ.
MY FATHER: Gawrsh. You’re cranky.
ME: What’s next?
MY FATHER: Well. . . .
ME: We are remembering to keep it exact. Keep it precise.
MY FATHER: Exact and precise.
ME: Right. So?
MY FATHER: Okay. There are four lanes ahead. You don't want to be in the far left one, because it makes you turn left, and you don't want to be in the next-to-left one, because that also makes you turn left—there are two left lanes and the traffic light makes you turn left in both of them—and you don't want to be in the next-to-the-next-to-the-left one, because then you have to go straight, so. . . .
ME: IN OTHER WORDS, YOU WANT ME TO TURN RIGHT.
MY FATHER: If you want to boil it down like that.
ME: Oh, I do. I DO WANT YOU TO BOIL IT DOWN.
MY FATHER: Fine, fine. I’ll keep it succinct.
ME: THANK YOU.
MY FATHER [after a pause]: You know you missed the turn back there, right?
ME: GODDAMMIT.
Thursday, May 19, 2016
Conversations with My Father: Sexting Edition
MY FATHER: Now, the other problem with my iPad is that it won’t take photos sideways.
ME: You mean, landscape?
MY FATHER: No, it takes photos of landscapes perfectly well.
ME: Well, I set myself up for that one. No, I mean the aspect itself is called landscape—where it’s longer from side to side—versus portrait, where it’s longer up and down.
MY FATHER: Yes. That’s the problem. My iPad won’t do it.
ME: I think what you mean to say is that you don’t know how to do it. Your iPad can do it.
MY FATHER: No. . . .
ME: Yes.
MY FATHER: No, I’m doing it right. . . .
ME: You are aware I’ve seen you use your iPad.
MY FATHER: To take it up and down, I hold it like this . . . and then I click on this. . . .
ME: Yes, and now you have a blurry portrait photo of your cat’s ass.
MY FATHER: Then to take it sideways, I turn it like this, and I click on this. . . .
ME: And now you have a nice landscape photo of the same cat’s ass.
MY FATHER: No, I don’t. It’s not sideways.
ME: Click here and let’s look at. . . . No, not there. Click here to go back. NO, not there. Here. NO, NOT THERE.
MY FATHER [mildly]: I’m just following your directions.
ME: Try keeping your other fingers away from the screen. Just use—Christ.
MY FATHER: My iPad has a weird tendency just to shut off.
ME: Yeah, it’s really weird how that happens when you push the button on top. Here. Give it to me. Good lord.
MY FATHER: You seem slightly tense, for some reason.
ME: Here are the photos you took. See? The first one is portrait. The second one is landscape. See? Sideways. Longer across than up and down.
MY FATHER [peering for a very long time at the screen and swiping back and forth]: Well, it certainly never did that before.
ME: It probably did. You just didn’t. . . .
MY FATHER [pointing]: What’s this?
ME: That’s the edit option. It will let you fool around with things like the brightness and contrast. . . .
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: That’s the trash icon.
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: You click that icon to send the photo to other people.
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: The heart icon just toggles on and off so that you can indicate your favorite photos. They’ll appear in a special ‘favorites’ album. Like, if you have a lot of photos. Let me show you on mine.
MY FATHER: I have three photos. I think I can tell which one is my favorite.
ME: No, you can have more than one favorite. It just means the ones you heart are the cream of the crop. I mean, on my iPad I have . . . fifteen thousand, three hundred and forty-five photos, but I’ve only favorited six hundred and sixty-two of them, which makes it easier to. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand, three hundred, and forty-five photos?
ME: But I only have six hundred and sixty-two favorites, which makes. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand photos?
ME: Right, so if I favorite the ones I really like. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand photos?
ME: What? I mean, that’s from the last ten years, and it’s not really all the photos I’ve. . . .
MY FATHER: My god. Why do you need fifteen thousand photos?
ME: I like taking photos! What?!
MY FATHER: What do you do with them?
ME: I mean, I look at them, I print them. Most of our apartment is decorated with my prints.
MY FATHER: Are you emailing them to people? Are you sexting people?
ME: What do you mean, am I sexting people?
MY FATHER: You know. Sexting people. On your phone.
ME: How many photos of my junk do you think I have?
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand? Gawrsh.
ME: I don’t have fifteen thousand photos of—! Wait, I think sexting is not the word you think it is. What is sexting, to you?
MY FATHER: When you get on your fancy iPhone and send someone a message with a photo.
ME: That’s texting.
MY FATHER: That’s what I said.
ME: You said sexting. Sexting has a shade of meaning that is very different. . . .
MY FATHER: What’s sexting?
ME: That’s when you take sexy photos of your private parts and sent them in a text message to someone. Sexy texting. Sexting. You know. Like Anthony Weiner. That’s probably where you picked up the word, on NPR.
MY FATHER: Who?
ME: Anthony Weiner. The representative who resigned because he’d sexted with several women.
MY FATHER [after a long pause]: How many photos of your private parts do you have on your iPad?
ME: It’s not fifteen thousand.
MY FATHER [curious]: Exactly how do you fit an iPad down your pants?
ME: You mean, landscape?
MY FATHER: No, it takes photos of landscapes perfectly well.
ME: Well, I set myself up for that one. No, I mean the aspect itself is called landscape—where it’s longer from side to side—versus portrait, where it’s longer up and down.
MY FATHER: Yes. That’s the problem. My iPad won’t do it.
ME: I think what you mean to say is that you don’t know how to do it. Your iPad can do it.
MY FATHER: No. . . .
ME: Yes.
MY FATHER: No, I’m doing it right. . . .
ME: You are aware I’ve seen you use your iPad.
MY FATHER: To take it up and down, I hold it like this . . . and then I click on this. . . .
ME: Yes, and now you have a blurry portrait photo of your cat’s ass.
MY FATHER: Then to take it sideways, I turn it like this, and I click on this. . . .
ME: And now you have a nice landscape photo of the same cat’s ass.
MY FATHER: No, I don’t. It’s not sideways.
ME: Click here and let’s look at. . . . No, not there. Click here to go back. NO, not there. Here. NO, NOT THERE.
MY FATHER [mildly]: I’m just following your directions.
ME: Try keeping your other fingers away from the screen. Just use—Christ.
MY FATHER: My iPad has a weird tendency just to shut off.
ME: Yeah, it’s really weird how that happens when you push the button on top. Here. Give it to me. Good lord.
MY FATHER: You seem slightly tense, for some reason.
ME: Here are the photos you took. See? The first one is portrait. The second one is landscape. See? Sideways. Longer across than up and down.
MY FATHER [peering for a very long time at the screen and swiping back and forth]: Well, it certainly never did that before.
ME: It probably did. You just didn’t. . . .
MY FATHER [pointing]: What’s this?
ME: That’s the edit option. It will let you fool around with things like the brightness and contrast. . . .
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: That’s the trash icon.
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: You click that icon to send the photo to other people.
MY FATHER: What’s this?
ME: The heart icon just toggles on and off so that you can indicate your favorite photos. They’ll appear in a special ‘favorites’ album. Like, if you have a lot of photos. Let me show you on mine.
MY FATHER: I have three photos. I think I can tell which one is my favorite.
ME: No, you can have more than one favorite. It just means the ones you heart are the cream of the crop. I mean, on my iPad I have . . . fifteen thousand, three hundred and forty-five photos, but I’ve only favorited six hundred and sixty-two of them, which makes it easier to. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand, three hundred, and forty-five photos?
ME: But I only have six hundred and sixty-two favorites, which makes. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand photos?
ME: Right, so if I favorite the ones I really like. . . .
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand photos?
ME: What? I mean, that’s from the last ten years, and it’s not really all the photos I’ve. . . .
MY FATHER: My god. Why do you need fifteen thousand photos?
ME: I like taking photos! What?!
MY FATHER: What do you do with them?
ME: I mean, I look at them, I print them. Most of our apartment is decorated with my prints.
MY FATHER: Are you emailing them to people? Are you sexting people?
ME: What do you mean, am I sexting people?
MY FATHER: You know. Sexting people. On your phone.
ME: How many photos of my junk do you think I have?
MY FATHER: Fifteen thousand? Gawrsh.
ME: I don’t have fifteen thousand photos of—! Wait, I think sexting is not the word you think it is. What is sexting, to you?
MY FATHER: When you get on your fancy iPhone and send someone a message with a photo.
ME: That’s texting.
MY FATHER: That’s what I said.
ME: You said sexting. Sexting has a shade of meaning that is very different. . . .
MY FATHER: What’s sexting?
ME: That’s when you take sexy photos of your private parts and sent them in a text message to someone. Sexy texting. Sexting. You know. Like Anthony Weiner. That’s probably where you picked up the word, on NPR.
MY FATHER: Who?
ME: Anthony Weiner. The representative who resigned because he’d sexted with several women.
MY FATHER [after a long pause]: How many photos of your private parts do you have on your iPad?
ME: It’s not fifteen thousand.
MY FATHER [curious]: Exactly how do you fit an iPad down your pants?
Tuesday, May 17, 2016
Conversations with My Father: Low Voltage Edition
SALES CLERK: Hi! Welcome to Batteries Plus! How can I help you this morning?
ME: My father needs a battery replacement for his cell phone.
MY FATHER: Well, I don’t need it.
ME: His battery can only hold a five-minute charge. He needs it. If it’s even possible for his model.
SALES CLERK: Oh, I’m sure that’s possible. We have all kinds of batteries for all kinds of cell phones.
ME: You haven’t seen the ancient artifact he’s carrying around, yet.
MY FATHER: The Verizon store sent me here. They don’t carry batteries for my model any more.
ME: That should give you an indication right there.
SALES CLERK: Let’s just take a look at . . . oh. Wow.
ME: I told you.
MY FATHER: Now, do you have any idea of how old this phone is?
SALES CLERK [with tact]: Well, it’s really large. . . .
ME: That phone is a bludgeon. It’s a billy club. That phone could be a murder weapon in Clue.
MY FATHER: Oh, gawrsh. It’s not one of your fancy iPhones, but it’s not that large.
ME: If I were a gangster and I had to get rid of a dirty rat, I’d tie his legs together and throw him into the river with that phone of yours as a deadweight.
SALES CLERK: Let me just open up the back so we can take a look at the battery . . . oh, my.
MY FATHER: What’s wrong?
ME: Good lord. That’s disgusting.
MY FATHER: What?
ME: How in the world has the inside of your phone gotten so dirty?
MY FATHER: I don’t know.
ME: Do you keep it buried in the cat box?!
SALES CLERK: Let me just blow this out.
ME: Good god, no, miss. You shouldn’t have to do that. Give it to me and I’ll blow it out. I’ll take it outside and blow it out.
SALES CLERK: I got it, but thank you, honey.
MY FATHER: It’s not that dirty.
ME: You aren’t able to see the filth. It looks like you use your battery cover as a boot scrape.
MY FATHER: I suspect you’re exaggerating.
SALES CLERK: Now, we do have this battery available, but since this is an, um, older model and not very common these days, I don’t want you to be shocked by the price.
MY FATHER [with suspicion]: How much?
SALES CLERK: Thirty-seven-fifty.
ME: That’s not bad. We’ll take it.
MY FATHER: I don’t know. I could probably get another year out of my battery. . . .
ME: By which point this battery could be no longer manufactured. Then you’d have to get a whole new phone.
MY FATHER: Oh, gawrsh.
SALES CLERK: Should I go ahead and replace it, then?
ME: Yes, please.
MY FATHER: Do you know how long that battery lasted me?
ME: A battery isn’t doing you any good if it only holds a five-minute charge. You really shouldn’t let it get that bad. Batteries are designed to be used. You need to take it off the charger occasionally, use it, and let it run down naturally.
MY FATHER: I don’t think that’s true.
SALES CLERK: Oh my goodness, honey, yes. You can’t leave it on the charger all the time. Not for this kind of battery. That will shorten the battery life by a lot.
ME: There. You have a battery expert telling you the same thing.
MY FATHER: This battery lasted for four years!
SALES CLERK: If you keep your battery in good condition, it can four years and still hold a charge for several hours.
ME: Thank you! See? She’s a battery genius.
MY FATHER: [grumbles]
ME: Sorry? Are you doubting the word of this fine, hard-working, underpaid battery genius?
SALES CLERK: Well thank you, honey! I’m going to ring this up and give you a fifteen percent Nice Man Discount.
MY FATHER [suddenly brightening]: Thank you very much!
ME: SHE MEANT ME.
ME: My father needs a battery replacement for his cell phone.
MY FATHER: Well, I don’t need it.
ME: His battery can only hold a five-minute charge. He needs it. If it’s even possible for his model.
SALES CLERK: Oh, I’m sure that’s possible. We have all kinds of batteries for all kinds of cell phones.
ME: You haven’t seen the ancient artifact he’s carrying around, yet.
MY FATHER: The Verizon store sent me here. They don’t carry batteries for my model any more.
ME: That should give you an indication right there.
SALES CLERK: Let’s just take a look at . . . oh. Wow.
ME: I told you.
MY FATHER: Now, do you have any idea of how old this phone is?
SALES CLERK [with tact]: Well, it’s really large. . . .
ME: That phone is a bludgeon. It’s a billy club. That phone could be a murder weapon in Clue.
MY FATHER: Oh, gawrsh. It’s not one of your fancy iPhones, but it’s not that large.
ME: If I were a gangster and I had to get rid of a dirty rat, I’d tie his legs together and throw him into the river with that phone of yours as a deadweight.
SALES CLERK: Let me just open up the back so we can take a look at the battery . . . oh, my.
MY FATHER: What’s wrong?
ME: Good lord. That’s disgusting.
MY FATHER: What?
ME: How in the world has the inside of your phone gotten so dirty?
MY FATHER: I don’t know.
ME: Do you keep it buried in the cat box?!
SALES CLERK: Let me just blow this out.
ME: Good god, no, miss. You shouldn’t have to do that. Give it to me and I’ll blow it out. I’ll take it outside and blow it out.
SALES CLERK: I got it, but thank you, honey.
MY FATHER: It’s not that dirty.
ME: You aren’t able to see the filth. It looks like you use your battery cover as a boot scrape.
MY FATHER: I suspect you’re exaggerating.
SALES CLERK: Now, we do have this battery available, but since this is an, um, older model and not very common these days, I don’t want you to be shocked by the price.
MY FATHER [with suspicion]: How much?
SALES CLERK: Thirty-seven-fifty.
ME: That’s not bad. We’ll take it.
MY FATHER: I don’t know. I could probably get another year out of my battery. . . .
ME: By which point this battery could be no longer manufactured. Then you’d have to get a whole new phone.
MY FATHER: Oh, gawrsh.
SALES CLERK: Should I go ahead and replace it, then?
ME: Yes, please.
MY FATHER: Do you know how long that battery lasted me?
ME: A battery isn’t doing you any good if it only holds a five-minute charge. You really shouldn’t let it get that bad. Batteries are designed to be used. You need to take it off the charger occasionally, use it, and let it run down naturally.
MY FATHER: I don’t think that’s true.
SALES CLERK: Oh my goodness, honey, yes. You can’t leave it on the charger all the time. Not for this kind of battery. That will shorten the battery life by a lot.
ME: There. You have a battery expert telling you the same thing.
MY FATHER: This battery lasted for four years!
SALES CLERK: If you keep your battery in good condition, it can four years and still hold a charge for several hours.
ME: Thank you! See? She’s a battery genius.
MY FATHER: [grumbles]
ME: Sorry? Are you doubting the word of this fine, hard-working, underpaid battery genius?
SALES CLERK: Well thank you, honey! I’m going to ring this up and give you a fifteen percent Nice Man Discount.
MY FATHER [suddenly brightening]: Thank you very much!
ME: SHE MEANT ME.
Sunday, April 3, 2016
The Memoir Back Cover Blurb: Another Writing Exercise
One of the concepts I tackle very early on in my memoir-writing class is the notion of how memoir differs from autobiography. On a very broad level, most people use the terms interchangeably. After all, librarians and book sellers shelve the two together.
For the purposes of my class, I ask students to believe in a minor distinction. An autobiography, I tell them, tends to be a chronological retelling of a person’s life, from birth to the present moment. Hollywood autobiographies in particular tend to hit certain beats—childhood, the recognition that acting brought attention and applause, the high school plays, the first acting jobs, the first big break. Then it’s a career replay that proceeds movie by movie and rehab by rehab, with some celebrity parties and a couple of marriages thrown in, until retirement age and the happy, quieter years in Palm Springs.
That’s not what I want you to do, I tell my students, right at the beginning of the first class. You’re not attempting a scrutiny of your entire life. Sure, you’ll have every incident in your life available for material, but what I’ll be asking you to do during the semester is to begin focusing upon a specific narrative with a connecting theme, selected from your decades of experience.
An individual life has too many stories to include in a single volume. They’re too wildly varied and jumbled, to boot. Every person I’ve known has multiple memoirs in them—multiple narratives to share. By the end of the semester, I tell my students, I’d like you to have begun thinking about which story of your life you’d like to take your first book to tell.
A book-length memoir, I stress to my students, week after week, has a through line. It is a well-composed snapshot of a portion of your time on this earth. It’s focused. It has an agenda . . . a story to tell. Like any snapshot, it can have as wide or tight a field of view as you choose; it can encompass years of a single relationship, or spend a hundred pages dissecting the subtleties and vicissitudes of a single weekend at Cape Cod. The aperture can be narrow, so that both the figures of your life and the background can retain all their rich detail. It can be wide open, so that the background is an atmospheric blur while the figures in the foreground command the attention. Those artistic choices are yours to make.
I encourage my students to seek out and read memoirs to see what I mean. I like using Alan Cumming’s Not My Father’s Son: A Memoir as an example of a well-written volume. Cumming has been in dozens of high-profile movies; he’s a staple on The Good Wife. He’s been a notorious catalyst in stage shows. He could easily have written a quick and dirty manuscript that consisted of the same easy beats and celebrity gossip as any Hollywood autobiography. What Cumming crafted, though, was a highly-readable memoir with a tight focus (as implied by the title) upon his relationship with his father. The memoir begins at a moment when, mere days before Cumming is about to begin taping for the BBC celebrity genealogy series, Who Do You Think You Are?, he receives a phone call from his father—a cold and abusive man who had terrorized Cumming’s childhood. Though they hadn’t spoken in decades, Cumming took the call only to have his father inform him, without emotion, that the show’s producers were planning to ambush him with the news that they were not biologically related; his father had not sired him.
The news comes out of left field. Cumming’s whole world is upended. The chapters alternate between deliberately-paced reminiscences, rich in sensory detail, about the abuses heaped upon him by his father, and the nervous days that follow in the current day of his narration as the show’s filming commences. The memoir’s scope, I tell my students as I describe the book to them, is narrow in its timeline—that is, the ‘action’ only takes place over the course of a couple of weeks as the show commences and finishes filming its one-hour segment.
But memoir is not tied to everyday chronology. It can wander, just as the mind and memory wanders from present to past to future. Cumming spends one chapter in the tense present-day, then in the next dwells upon his past relationship with his father and all the various indignities he suffered at the man’s hands. Back and forth in time he leaps, lingering in the past, inexorably advancing toward terrible revelation in the present. The book’s a page-turner. It’s a thriller in memoir form. If they’re as good as his first, Cumming could write as many memoirs as he likes and I’d be happy to read and recommend them all.
So I ask my students, right from the first class of the semester, to start reading memoirs. Or at the very least, to start looking at them—to pick them up at the library or the bookstore and to read the summaries on their jackets, or to browse Amazon and peruse synopses there. What I want them to realize is that each memoir is a mere slice of a person’s life, a view through a single facet into the jewel that is the author. I talk about authors who have written multiple memoirs, like David Sedaris, or my friend Anne Soffee, whose two touching and funny memoirs, Snake Hips: Belly Dancing and How I Found True Love, and Nerd Girl Rocks Paradise City: A True Story of Faking It in Hair Metal LA, I bring in to class to pass around.
I talk about the ways in which an author can write multiple memoirs by changing her vantage point, by focusing upon another set of associated memories and sharing them in a literary way. I bring up the example of Betty MacDonald, a favorite humorist of mine and the author of the eternally popular children’s Mrs. Piggle-Wiggle series. Between 1945-1955, MacDonald published no less than four popular memoirs.
The first, the runaway bestseller The Egg & I, is the story of MacDonald during her twenties, who despite being used to life in urban Seattle, allowed her husband to persuade her to move with him to the most rustic corner of the Olympic Peninsula to live on a chicken ranch. Lonely and surrounded by eccentric neighbors and a lack of amenities, she learned—somewhat—to make do. Although MacDonald was miserable most of the time, and although the marriage ended after only a few years, the book comes across as comedy; its inevitable Hollywood adaptation spawned the nine movies in the lowbrow Ma & Pa Kettle series. She followed up her bestselling success with The Plague & I, which focused on her nearly-fatal battle against tuberculosis in the days before antibiotics, and of attempting to endure the rigid rules of the charitable sanitarium in which she was quarantined. Her ability to spin comic gold from such a forbidding premise is, frankly, one of the reasons I admire her as a stylist.
MacDonald’s Anybody Can Do Anything chronicled the dozens of jobs she attempted to hold down during the lean years of the Great Depression, and of her older sister's persistence in insisting that whatever skills a job might call for, from typing to photography to animal husbandry, MacDonald could provide it. Her fourth and final memoir was Onions in the Stew, a memoir about a happy second marriage and a move to the Pacific Northwest’s Vashon Island, complicated only by the struggle to raise two teen-aged daughters.
All four books wander freely back to MacDonald's childhood, I tell my students; they weave in material from the writer’s past to illuminate the choices she made during the four distinct time periods of each memoir. Though the material is often kind of grim at its core—a bad marriage, infectious disease, poverty, problem adolescents—her tone is distinctly light-hearted. What’s more, her voice is recognizable. You get an idea of who 'Betty' was from book to book, despite the disparate topics.
We discuss all these things in the classroom for several weeks, and then midway through the semester I give them this assignment. I want you to envision your memoirs as finished, literary products, I say. This week, at home, take an hour and pretend you’re planning your career in advance. Make believe you’re going to write three memoirs. I want you each to envision what segments of your experience these memoirs will cover. Take some notes. Come up with a title, if it helps. Then I want you to write one or two paragraphs that describe each of these three books—and I want you to write those synopses as if they’re going to appear on the back covers.
Now, at this point there are always questions. There’s always a literalist in the book who points out that the back cover of HER books is where the author’s photo and bio goes, because SHE only reads HARD COVERS, the way the good lord intended CIVILIZED people to read. I tell the stickler that she can pretend she’s writing for the inside flap, then. Whatever. There’s always someone who claims he’s never read a book jacket description. Lies. It’s all lies. We’re force-fed synopses of stories our entire lives, I remind them. Every TV Guide entry, every Netflix blurb, every movie trailer is trying to reach and and grab an audience by summarizing itself in the most appealing manner possible. That’s what I want my students to do in this exercise.
Look, I tell them. Here’s one of many ways I could present my life story:
So look there, I say to my students. Two paragraphs summarizing a potential memoir of my life. The pitch conveys a certain sense of tone—somewhat comic, somewhat the story of a struggle. It clearly delineates certain periods of my life from which I’ll be drawing. At the same time, it gives me a lot of leeway in the material I choose. It gives me plenty of opportunity to talk about my children-of-the-sixties parents and their progressive child-rearing ideas. I could have a lot of fun with that premise.
But it’s not the only book I could write about myself. Here’s another of several that I present:
So do this very thing with your own ideas. Pretend I’m an editor, and that you’ve got three memoirs to pitch as our elevator climbs from the ground floor to my ninety-seventh floor office suite. Sell them to me quickly with your book blurbs.
Here’s what I want from those pitches you’re going to present the following week, I tell them: I want a sense of who you are. I want to know what stories you need to tell, and how you’ll present yourself from volume to volume. Your tone doesn’t need to be the same from pitch to pitch. Each might cover some of the same events in your life from different angles. You might not even want to write any of these books when you’ve completed the exercise, and that’s okay too. Knowing what you don’t want to write is valuable, too.
Working up a number of book cover blurbs or pitches, though, will show you that you have options as you write. The exercise will drive home that in the end, as the author, you have complete control over how your life stories are narrated.
The next week, when my students come in with their pitches, a lot of them show they’ve really gotten the assignment. Their back-of-book blurbs often sound as if they were copied from publisher websites. Not everybody comes in with three, but most return with at least two in hand. I have them read their synopses, ask the rest of the class for their reactions, and ask everybody the big question: Would you want to read that? By and large, they absolutely would.
Then I ask the author: Would you want to write that? Because ultimately, that’s the most important takeaway from the assignment.
Almost universally, they do.
Even the students who only manage to eke out a single blurb benefit from the process. They start picturing their essays as part of a possible whole; they begin to understand that even class assignments can contribute to their overall goal. Some of the students with multiple pitches already know which, if any, of them they prefer to write. Others are giddy with choice.
Now, most of my students don’t aspire to publication. That’s okay. I stress throughout the semester that, at minimum, the rigorous self-examination that writing a memoir requires is its own reward. Having essays or chapters to share with family and friends is a heck of a bonus, though. The exercise is none the less valuable for those students whose work will never hit a Barnes and Noble. Once the students begin to imagine their life stories as finished volumes—as viable, valuable intellectual properties—their sense of pride swells. They become enthusiastic about their work. They stop seeing what they’re doing as disconnected weekly essay assignments, and begin writing in a way that contributes to a cohesive narrative. The glimmer and promise of a finished book, published or not, is a powerful carrot on a stick.
In a craft as reliant on self-starting as writing, students need to be able to spur themselves on a regular basis to sit down at their computers or with their pads of paper. A powerful motivation—particularly when it’s an idea for progression that they’ve envisioned themselves—can make the difference between a finished literary product and a dream that languishes, stillborn.
For the purposes of my class, I ask students to believe in a minor distinction. An autobiography, I tell them, tends to be a chronological retelling of a person’s life, from birth to the present moment. Hollywood autobiographies in particular tend to hit certain beats—childhood, the recognition that acting brought attention and applause, the high school plays, the first acting jobs, the first big break. Then it’s a career replay that proceeds movie by movie and rehab by rehab, with some celebrity parties and a couple of marriages thrown in, until retirement age and the happy, quieter years in Palm Springs.
That’s not what I want you to do, I tell my students, right at the beginning of the first class. You’re not attempting a scrutiny of your entire life. Sure, you’ll have every incident in your life available for material, but what I’ll be asking you to do during the semester is to begin focusing upon a specific narrative with a connecting theme, selected from your decades of experience.
An individual life has too many stories to include in a single volume. They’re too wildly varied and jumbled, to boot. Every person I’ve known has multiple memoirs in them—multiple narratives to share. By the end of the semester, I tell my students, I’d like you to have begun thinking about which story of your life you’d like to take your first book to tell.
A book-length memoir, I stress to my students, week after week, has a through line. It is a well-composed snapshot of a portion of your time on this earth. It’s focused. It has an agenda . . . a story to tell. Like any snapshot, it can have as wide or tight a field of view as you choose; it can encompass years of a single relationship, or spend a hundred pages dissecting the subtleties and vicissitudes of a single weekend at Cape Cod. The aperture can be narrow, so that both the figures of your life and the background can retain all their rich detail. It can be wide open, so that the background is an atmospheric blur while the figures in the foreground command the attention. Those artistic choices are yours to make.
I encourage my students to seek out and read memoirs to see what I mean. I like using Alan Cumming’s Not My Father’s Son: A Memoir as an example of a well-written volume. Cumming has been in dozens of high-profile movies; he’s a staple on The Good Wife. He’s been a notorious catalyst in stage shows. He could easily have written a quick and dirty manuscript that consisted of the same easy beats and celebrity gossip as any Hollywood autobiography. What Cumming crafted, though, was a highly-readable memoir with a tight focus (as implied by the title) upon his relationship with his father. The memoir begins at a moment when, mere days before Cumming is about to begin taping for the BBC celebrity genealogy series, Who Do You Think You Are?, he receives a phone call from his father—a cold and abusive man who had terrorized Cumming’s childhood. Though they hadn’t spoken in decades, Cumming took the call only to have his father inform him, without emotion, that the show’s producers were planning to ambush him with the news that they were not biologically related; his father had not sired him.
The news comes out of left field. Cumming’s whole world is upended. The chapters alternate between deliberately-paced reminiscences, rich in sensory detail, about the abuses heaped upon him by his father, and the nervous days that follow in the current day of his narration as the show’s filming commences. The memoir’s scope, I tell my students as I describe the book to them, is narrow in its timeline—that is, the ‘action’ only takes place over the course of a couple of weeks as the show commences and finishes filming its one-hour segment.
But memoir is not tied to everyday chronology. It can wander, just as the mind and memory wanders from present to past to future. Cumming spends one chapter in the tense present-day, then in the next dwells upon his past relationship with his father and all the various indignities he suffered at the man’s hands. Back and forth in time he leaps, lingering in the past, inexorably advancing toward terrible revelation in the present. The book’s a page-turner. It’s a thriller in memoir form. If they’re as good as his first, Cumming could write as many memoirs as he likes and I’d be happy to read and recommend them all.
So I ask my students, right from the first class of the semester, to start reading memoirs. Or at the very least, to start looking at them—to pick them up at the library or the bookstore and to read the summaries on their jackets, or to browse Amazon and peruse synopses there. What I want them to realize is that each memoir is a mere slice of a person’s life, a view through a single facet into the jewel that is the author. I talk about authors who have written multiple memoirs, like David Sedaris, or my friend Anne Soffee, whose two touching and funny memoirs, Snake Hips: Belly Dancing and How I Found True Love, and Nerd Girl Rocks Paradise City: A True Story of Faking It in Hair Metal LA, I bring in to class to pass around.
I talk about the ways in which an author can write multiple memoirs by changing her vantage point, by focusing upon another set of associated memories and sharing them in a literary way. I bring up the example of Betty MacDonald, a favorite humorist of mine and the author of the eternally popular children’s Mrs. Piggle-Wiggle series. Between 1945-1955, MacDonald published no less than four popular memoirs.
The first, the runaway bestseller The Egg & I, is the story of MacDonald during her twenties, who despite being used to life in urban Seattle, allowed her husband to persuade her to move with him to the most rustic corner of the Olympic Peninsula to live on a chicken ranch. Lonely and surrounded by eccentric neighbors and a lack of amenities, she learned—somewhat—to make do. Although MacDonald was miserable most of the time, and although the marriage ended after only a few years, the book comes across as comedy; its inevitable Hollywood adaptation spawned the nine movies in the lowbrow Ma & Pa Kettle series. She followed up her bestselling success with The Plague & I, which focused on her nearly-fatal battle against tuberculosis in the days before antibiotics, and of attempting to endure the rigid rules of the charitable sanitarium in which she was quarantined. Her ability to spin comic gold from such a forbidding premise is, frankly, one of the reasons I admire her as a stylist.
MacDonald’s Anybody Can Do Anything chronicled the dozens of jobs she attempted to hold down during the lean years of the Great Depression, and of her older sister's persistence in insisting that whatever skills a job might call for, from typing to photography to animal husbandry, MacDonald could provide it. Her fourth and final memoir was Onions in the Stew, a memoir about a happy second marriage and a move to the Pacific Northwest’s Vashon Island, complicated only by the struggle to raise two teen-aged daughters.
All four books wander freely back to MacDonald's childhood, I tell my students; they weave in material from the writer’s past to illuminate the choices she made during the four distinct time periods of each memoir. Though the material is often kind of grim at its core—a bad marriage, infectious disease, poverty, problem adolescents—her tone is distinctly light-hearted. What’s more, her voice is recognizable. You get an idea of who 'Betty' was from book to book, despite the disparate topics.
We discuss all these things in the classroom for several weeks, and then midway through the semester I give them this assignment. I want you to envision your memoirs as finished, literary products, I say. This week, at home, take an hour and pretend you’re planning your career in advance. Make believe you’re going to write three memoirs. I want you each to envision what segments of your experience these memoirs will cover. Take some notes. Come up with a title, if it helps. Then I want you to write one or two paragraphs that describe each of these three books—and I want you to write those synopses as if they’re going to appear on the back covers.
Now, at this point there are always questions. There’s always a literalist in the book who points out that the back cover of HER books is where the author’s photo and bio goes, because SHE only reads HARD COVERS, the way the good lord intended CIVILIZED people to read. I tell the stickler that she can pretend she’s writing for the inside flap, then. Whatever. There’s always someone who claims he’s never read a book jacket description. Lies. It’s all lies. We’re force-fed synopses of stories our entire lives, I remind them. Every TV Guide entry, every Netflix blurb, every movie trailer is trying to reach and and grab an audience by summarizing itself in the most appealing manner possible. That’s what I want my students to do in this exercise.
Look, I tell them. Here’s one of many ways I could present my life story:
Shocking her conservative relatives and in-laws was my mother’s favorite pastime. When I was six years old, she visited England and saw her first drag show. She returned to the states and, hoping to be provocative, promptly announced, tongue in cheek, that she’d decided I could have a fine and profitable future as a female impersonator.
Although I’ve never donned women’s clothes, there's something ironic about the fact that decades later I was perfectly comfortable to assume a female pseudonym in order to pen several novels of chick lit. My mother’s early career goals for me, however, were just the start of a life in which I was a constant wildcard attempting to assimilate—like a drag queen attempting to replicate the feminine, I felt I was always trying to ‘pass’ as something I wasn’t. Learning how not to draw attention as the only WASP in public school, or re-assimilating white culture upon re-entry to a preppy Southern college, or erasing my Southern accent in order not to attract attention in academia—all of it was boot camp preparation to being the only male author among hundreds and thousands of women at romance writer conventions.
So look there, I say to my students. Two paragraphs summarizing a potential memoir of my life. The pitch conveys a certain sense of tone—somewhat comic, somewhat the story of a struggle. It clearly delineates certain periods of my life from which I’ll be drawing. At the same time, it gives me a lot of leeway in the material I choose. It gives me plenty of opportunity to talk about my children-of-the-sixties parents and their progressive child-rearing ideas. I could have a lot of fun with that premise.
But it’s not the only book I could write about myself. Here’s another of several that I present:
I was twenty-three when I packed all my worldly belongings and moved into downtown Detroit, Michigan during the height of its reputation as the murder and crack cocaine capital of the country. On my first afternoon there, during a visit to the only grocery store within two miles of my new apartment, I found the market swarmed by cops. They descended on a vagrant standing next to me and shook him down, sending a cascade of knives and guns from his coat onto the floor.
My twenty-five years in the city that followed were a love-hate affair, as I came of age trying fiercely to defend my commitment to the city, yet found myself increasingly worn down by its violence, its arson and gun-related lawlessness, its crumbling streets and buildings, its overt racism, and its poverty. Like Detroit, I saw myself as a scrappy survivor trying to reinvent himself. And very much like the city, I eventually lacked the perspective to know when enough was enough.Again, I ask them if they can discern the tone of this proposed book. Can they envision the front cover? Yes, I’m pretty sure it’d be an artsy shot of a blooming weed flower in front of a burnt-out building, too. Very clearly this memoir would focus on the two and a half decades of my life when I lived in the city of Detroit. At the same time, though, there’s enough associative leeway to write about all kinds of things—the community in which I grew up, my expectations of living in cities based on the places I’d lived before, the youthful hopes and dreams I’d nurtured up to the point I’d reestablished myself. Could you see this as a book sitting on a store shelf, I ask? Of course you could.
So do this very thing with your own ideas. Pretend I’m an editor, and that you’ve got three memoirs to pitch as our elevator climbs from the ground floor to my ninety-seventh floor office suite. Sell them to me quickly with your book blurbs.
Here’s what I want from those pitches you’re going to present the following week, I tell them: I want a sense of who you are. I want to know what stories you need to tell, and how you’ll present yourself from volume to volume. Your tone doesn’t need to be the same from pitch to pitch. Each might cover some of the same events in your life from different angles. You might not even want to write any of these books when you’ve completed the exercise, and that’s okay too. Knowing what you don’t want to write is valuable, too.
Working up a number of book cover blurbs or pitches, though, will show you that you have options as you write. The exercise will drive home that in the end, as the author, you have complete control over how your life stories are narrated.
The next week, when my students come in with their pitches, a lot of them show they’ve really gotten the assignment. Their back-of-book blurbs often sound as if they were copied from publisher websites. Not everybody comes in with three, but most return with at least two in hand. I have them read their synopses, ask the rest of the class for their reactions, and ask everybody the big question: Would you want to read that? By and large, they absolutely would.
Then I ask the author: Would you want to write that? Because ultimately, that’s the most important takeaway from the assignment.
Almost universally, they do.
Even the students who only manage to eke out a single blurb benefit from the process. They start picturing their essays as part of a possible whole; they begin to understand that even class assignments can contribute to their overall goal. Some of the students with multiple pitches already know which, if any, of them they prefer to write. Others are giddy with choice.
Now, most of my students don’t aspire to publication. That’s okay. I stress throughout the semester that, at minimum, the rigorous self-examination that writing a memoir requires is its own reward. Having essays or chapters to share with family and friends is a heck of a bonus, though. The exercise is none the less valuable for those students whose work will never hit a Barnes and Noble. Once the students begin to imagine their life stories as finished volumes—as viable, valuable intellectual properties—their sense of pride swells. They become enthusiastic about their work. They stop seeing what they’re doing as disconnected weekly essay assignments, and begin writing in a way that contributes to a cohesive narrative. The glimmer and promise of a finished book, published or not, is a powerful carrot on a stick.
In a craft as reliant on self-starting as writing, students need to be able to spur themselves on a regular basis to sit down at their computers or with their pads of paper. A powerful motivation—particularly when it’s an idea for progression that they’ve envisioned themselves—can make the difference between a finished literary product and a dream that languishes, stillborn.
Thursday, March 17, 2016
Super Subtext: Another Writing Exercise
The memoir-writing class I teach has a syllabus that’s changed remarkably little over the years. It’s evolved, certainly, as I’ve honed the exercises and assignments to be both fun and provide an obvious path to skill mastery. Overall, though, the grand design of the class has remained the same: as I urge students to start writing about their experiences, I have them start making timelines of their life, then identifying the areas of most interest for a potential book-length memoir, and finally thinking of the stories of their lives as a focused literary form—all while trying to provide them the basics of good storytelling.
On the other hand, I originally designed my Creative Writing Calisthenics class to be totally modular. I planned a handful of in-class exercises to have ready, at a moment’s notice. My thought, though, was that from week to week I’d assess the types of projects the students were bringing for critique, and from there I’d decide what they needed to explore. My students, this semester, have really been on point; I was so blown away by their short stories last week that the seminar ran nearly an hour late because everyone was so excited to be there. (How often does that happen?)
During the critique session last week, though, I noticed that a couple of the students were avoiding the use of dialogue in their stories. They’d write paragraph after paragraph of luscious description that dripped with sensory detail, but have their characters interact only in non-spoken ways. They’d tell us the characters chatted; they didn’t show us about what. You’ve got opportunities here, here, and here for dialogue, I’d tell them. Don’t let them go to waste!
For this week’s class, I thought I’d make up an opening calisthenic that would stretch their dialogue muscles. Not only dialogue, but subtext. Every good actor knows about subtext. Subtext is the motivation underlying each line an individual character utters in a script—the unspoken emotions, the murky meanings that the person talking may feel quite deeply, but doesn’t, can’t, or won’t put into speech.
A good writer keeps track of his characters’ subtexts. In a stage play, a sycophant might harbor deep feelings of hostility toward his supervisor, but he’ll say the sweetest yeses and verbally brown his nose. However, his physical reactions, stance, eye contact, expression, might possibly betray many of the true emotions roiling underneath. Written stories handle subtext slightly differently; the nonverbal communications of body language must be described, the state of mind hinted at, though perhaps not explicitly detailed.
It’s important for all writers to remember that every character, no matter how minor, speaks with his or her own subtexts. Knowing why a character says something is as important as—and quite often is the determination of—the actual words that come out of her mouth.
One of the most helpful classes I enjoyed in college happened in my Beginning Acting course, my freshman year at William & Mary. Professor Richard Palmer handed those of us in the seminar a list of lines to learn on the spot for a two-person skit. We all memorized the same ten or so lines. They were so mundane in nature that the very blandness of them made them easy to regurgitate. If I recall correctly, they started something like this:
PERSON 1: Hello
PERSON 2: Hi.
PERSON 1: How are you?
PERSON 2: Pretty well, I guess.
I mean, I think I’ve conveyed the white-hot excitement of the written words, there. What mattered wasn’t the exchange of niceties, however. Mr. Palmer would take each pair of actors aside, immediately before they got up in front of the class, and whisper to us our secret motivations. “You,” he’d say to my partner, “are a prison warden delivering a prisoner his last meal. And you,” he’d tell me, “are a death row prisoner scheduled to go to the electric chair before noon.” Our job as actors, then, was to use our delivery, our tone of voice, facial expression, body language, and a heavy amount of miming to imply what exactly was going on.
I remember being surprised how often the other students in the class figured out the various scenarios. I acted in one comic variation in which I was a guy on an elevator trying to pick up a pretty girl, while my partner’s recoiling reaction made it obvious to the seminar that she wasn’t biting. I remember another pair used the lines to convey pretty vividly that they were just about to walk down the aisle and get married. No one was on the nose about the death row situation, but they did manage to glean that there were life-or-death stakes involved. (I don’t know. Maybe I should’ve mimed the electric chair at the end.)
The point, of course, was to make us understand that the words themselves weren’t the only thing that mattered. The words weren’t doing all the work. We were all using the same sparse script. It managed to lend itself to any number of situations. What got the subtext across were all the other skills we as actors brought to the table.
Now, in a fiction writing class, it’s the words that matter. The words are doing all the work. I wanted to create a dialogue exercise—straight dialogue, no description, no internal monologue, no indication for them to use anything other than the spoken word to imply deep and seething currents of subtext.
First, I discussed the notion of subtext with my brilliant students this week. “If you were a pregnant character in one of your stories,” I suggested, “and you standing with a co-worker at a water cooler, and you wanted to convey to your coworker through dialogue that you were pregnant—without actually saying the words, and without being able to do something physical and non-verbal like this—” and here I rested my cupped hands on an imaginary baby bump, “what kind of thing would you say?”
“Oh my gosh, I can’t believe I feel so nauseous this morning!” immediately replied one student.
“I’ve been thinking it’s time to freshen up that spare room of mine,” blurted another.
Either of those examples were a thousand times better than anything I’d dreamed up in my class notes. They totally had the general concept under control.
I then led them on to the callisthenic itself. I had the students pair up and share a single sheet of paper. I’d prepared colored notecards ahead of time. Each pair was going to write out a conversation made of nothing but speeches, I informed them. On pink notecards, I’d printed who their characters were, where their characters were located at the moment, and what was the situation prompting the conversation. In order to avoid false starts and get right to the point, I also provided the first line of each pair’s dialogue. So, for one of the groups, it looked like this:
The Characters
• The Single Older Sister
• The Single Younger Sister
The Setting
• The wedding reception of a childhood friend
The Situation
• Have a conversation about the unsuitability of the marriage you’ve just attended.
The First Line
• "He's just so wrong for her, don't you think?"
I gave the students a moment to read their pink notecard. Then I let them randomly pick one of two blue notecards made especially for their team—a secret subtext card that only their character would know, though they were forbidden to say it aloud. They were not to show these secret subtexts to their partners at any point during the exercise; they could only reveal them when I said.
So, for the sisters at the wedding, the random subtexts were:
Random Subtext 1
• You think your sister is eternally single because she's too picky about guys.
Random Subtext 2
• You have always found your sister infuriatingly controlling. That's probably the number one reason why she's still single.
Here’s an example from another group:
The Characters
• The Husband
• The Wife
The Setting
• Your breakfast table at home
The Situation
• Have a conversation with each other about the girl your son is dating.
The First Line
• "Jeremy was on the front porch kissing that girl of his well past midnight, you know."
Random Subtext 1
• You think your spouse has been paying too much attention to matters outside your marriage.
Random Subtext 2
• You find it ironic that your spouse shows such interest in your son's love life, when he/she hasn't been paying a bit of attention to your own.
I told the students to take ten seconds to choose who would take which character, and to decide who would be writing the first line I’d kindly provided. It didn’t matter which person spoke the first line; it didn’t matter which subtext either character got. (I loved the potential randomness of it. If I were to do it again, I might come up with even more subtexts for each pair, so I’d never know what I was going to get.)
They’d have eight minutes to take turns writing their lines of dialogue down on the sheets of paper they were sharing.
Go.
I sat in place, listening discreetly to the giggles as they played in their little sandboxes. I didn’t really know how successful the exercise might be, as I’d only conjured it up the day before. I deliberately attempted to create scenarios that might lead to squabbling, or polite hostility. There’s rich subtext to be found in situation in which two characters know each other well enough to have accumulated a heavy catalog of the other’s faults, but are compelled by circumstances not to speak of them directly.
But honestly, I had no idea whether these short dialogues would sink or swim. The only thing in which I could take heart was how quickly their pens flew across and covered the sheets of notebook paper.
Eight minutes later, I had them break off their dialogue where it was. I asked each pair to read their conversation aloud to the class. The sisters at the wedding went first. I know for a fact that the Younger Sister who was supposed to be perceived as the choosy one hadn’t read Older Sister’s blue subtext card (“You think your sister is eternally single because she's too picky about guys”), but by some stroke of good fortune the Younger Sister very quickly launched into a launched into a diatribe about the imaginary groom’s faults (“He’s too short, he has no chin, and those freckles!”) that fed right into Older Sister’s unspoken agenda, prompting some tart family bickering that was so naturally written that it sounded as if it had been transcribed from an actual wedding reception.
When they were finished, I waited for the laughter to clear before asking, “What does Older Sister here think about Younger Sister?”
Immediately someone said, “She’s distressed about her lifestyle choices,” and someone else zeroed in a little further: “She obviously thinks her younger sister is too picky about men.”
I told Older Sister to reveal her blue card. It read almost word for word what the last student had suggested. “How about Younger Sister?” I asked the class. “What are her feelings about Older Sister?”
“That she’s too intrusive,” said someone. Another student said, “I think she feels she’s being controlled and bossed around?” I had Younger Sister reveal her blue card.
The woman who had written the Younger Sister lines spoke up. “But wait,” she said, thinking aloud. “I had absolutely no idea what my partner thought about me, but somehow she got me to act as if I was picky and to say exactly what she wanted to hear, when I gave her the list of the groom’s shortcomings. . . .” She thought some more. “I mean, I fed right into her.”
“That’s subtext at work,” I pointed out, nodding vigorously. “Older Sister gave you a prompt that very clearly indicated she expected you to find things wrong with the poor groom, and you obliged her by giving that list. Her character never outright said, ‘Oh lord, I think you’re a persnickety bitch and I’m sure you’ve already got a laundry list of minor things that you’ve decided are this man’s major faults,’ but she clearly expected that from your character—and you obliged by giving it to her. You confirmed her prejudices.”
“And I didn’t know I was supposed to be controlling!” said the woman who had played Older Sister. “She turned me into it! She controlled me and made me controlling!”
I didn’t expect this reaction, but I found it to be a universal theme with the exercise. The students were so busy concentrating on conveying their hidden subtexts that they weren’t really engaging in any detective work about what their partners’ characters secretly thought about them. Yet somehow, in the sisters’ wedding squabbling, or the husband and wife icily and tacitly discussing their marriage through the vehicle of their son’s porch light make-out session, or whatever situation they encountered, everyone seemed to understand that when one character really brings their subtext to an encounter—even subtly—other characters will respond at an instinctive level.
The exercise made clear that everything was as it should be—their readers/listeners were able to discern exactly what information they needed to know about the two characters they created on the spot, while the characters each remained blissfully unaware of what the other really thought of them. They were even somewhat ignorant of how they themselves were behaving in ways that justified the other.
Every character a writer creates, at any given moment, has his or her own hopes and dreams and motivations. To each line of dialogue, they’re bringing entire worlds of experience and emotion. The mildest of declarations, deep inside, can be the throwing down of a gauntlet; a seemingly milquetoast question can be a covert declaration of war.
It’s the writer’s job to know what every character wants and feels, and what wild unknowns they wish to convey—particularly when the characters don’t know for themselves. Without subtext, dialogue is bland. Interchangeable. With it, it’s a writer’s best tool to conveying the individual rich worlds that each character occupies.
On the other hand, I originally designed my Creative Writing Calisthenics class to be totally modular. I planned a handful of in-class exercises to have ready, at a moment’s notice. My thought, though, was that from week to week I’d assess the types of projects the students were bringing for critique, and from there I’d decide what they needed to explore. My students, this semester, have really been on point; I was so blown away by their short stories last week that the seminar ran nearly an hour late because everyone was so excited to be there. (How often does that happen?)
During the critique session last week, though, I noticed that a couple of the students were avoiding the use of dialogue in their stories. They’d write paragraph after paragraph of luscious description that dripped with sensory detail, but have their characters interact only in non-spoken ways. They’d tell us the characters chatted; they didn’t show us about what. You’ve got opportunities here, here, and here for dialogue, I’d tell them. Don’t let them go to waste!
For this week’s class, I thought I’d make up an opening calisthenic that would stretch their dialogue muscles. Not only dialogue, but subtext. Every good actor knows about subtext. Subtext is the motivation underlying each line an individual character utters in a script—the unspoken emotions, the murky meanings that the person talking may feel quite deeply, but doesn’t, can’t, or won’t put into speech.
A good writer keeps track of his characters’ subtexts. In a stage play, a sycophant might harbor deep feelings of hostility toward his supervisor, but he’ll say the sweetest yeses and verbally brown his nose. However, his physical reactions, stance, eye contact, expression, might possibly betray many of the true emotions roiling underneath. Written stories handle subtext slightly differently; the nonverbal communications of body language must be described, the state of mind hinted at, though perhaps not explicitly detailed.
It’s important for all writers to remember that every character, no matter how minor, speaks with his or her own subtexts. Knowing why a character says something is as important as—and quite often is the determination of—the actual words that come out of her mouth.
One of the most helpful classes I enjoyed in college happened in my Beginning Acting course, my freshman year at William & Mary. Professor Richard Palmer handed those of us in the seminar a list of lines to learn on the spot for a two-person skit. We all memorized the same ten or so lines. They were so mundane in nature that the very blandness of them made them easy to regurgitate. If I recall correctly, they started something like this:
PERSON 1: Hello
PERSON 2: Hi.
PERSON 1: How are you?
PERSON 2: Pretty well, I guess.
I mean, I think I’ve conveyed the white-hot excitement of the written words, there. What mattered wasn’t the exchange of niceties, however. Mr. Palmer would take each pair of actors aside, immediately before they got up in front of the class, and whisper to us our secret motivations. “You,” he’d say to my partner, “are a prison warden delivering a prisoner his last meal. And you,” he’d tell me, “are a death row prisoner scheduled to go to the electric chair before noon.” Our job as actors, then, was to use our delivery, our tone of voice, facial expression, body language, and a heavy amount of miming to imply what exactly was going on.
I remember being surprised how often the other students in the class figured out the various scenarios. I acted in one comic variation in which I was a guy on an elevator trying to pick up a pretty girl, while my partner’s recoiling reaction made it obvious to the seminar that she wasn’t biting. I remember another pair used the lines to convey pretty vividly that they were just about to walk down the aisle and get married. No one was on the nose about the death row situation, but they did manage to glean that there were life-or-death stakes involved. (I don’t know. Maybe I should’ve mimed the electric chair at the end.)
The point, of course, was to make us understand that the words themselves weren’t the only thing that mattered. The words weren’t doing all the work. We were all using the same sparse script. It managed to lend itself to any number of situations. What got the subtext across were all the other skills we as actors brought to the table.
Now, in a fiction writing class, it’s the words that matter. The words are doing all the work. I wanted to create a dialogue exercise—straight dialogue, no description, no internal monologue, no indication for them to use anything other than the spoken word to imply deep and seething currents of subtext.
First, I discussed the notion of subtext with my brilliant students this week. “If you were a pregnant character in one of your stories,” I suggested, “and you standing with a co-worker at a water cooler, and you wanted to convey to your coworker through dialogue that you were pregnant—without actually saying the words, and without being able to do something physical and non-verbal like this—” and here I rested my cupped hands on an imaginary baby bump, “what kind of thing would you say?”
“Oh my gosh, I can’t believe I feel so nauseous this morning!” immediately replied one student.
“I’ve been thinking it’s time to freshen up that spare room of mine,” blurted another.
Either of those examples were a thousand times better than anything I’d dreamed up in my class notes. They totally had the general concept under control.
I then led them on to the callisthenic itself. I had the students pair up and share a single sheet of paper. I’d prepared colored notecards ahead of time. Each pair was going to write out a conversation made of nothing but speeches, I informed them. On pink notecards, I’d printed who their characters were, where their characters were located at the moment, and what was the situation prompting the conversation. In order to avoid false starts and get right to the point, I also provided the first line of each pair’s dialogue. So, for one of the groups, it looked like this:
The Characters
• The Single Older Sister
• The Single Younger Sister
The Setting
• The wedding reception of a childhood friend
The Situation
• Have a conversation about the unsuitability of the marriage you’ve just attended.
The First Line
• "He's just so wrong for her, don't you think?"
I gave the students a moment to read their pink notecard. Then I let them randomly pick one of two blue notecards made especially for their team—a secret subtext card that only their character would know, though they were forbidden to say it aloud. They were not to show these secret subtexts to their partners at any point during the exercise; they could only reveal them when I said.
So, for the sisters at the wedding, the random subtexts were:
Random Subtext 1
• You think your sister is eternally single because she's too picky about guys.
Random Subtext 2
• You have always found your sister infuriatingly controlling. That's probably the number one reason why she's still single.
Here’s an example from another group:
The Characters
• The Husband
• The Wife
The Setting
• Your breakfast table at home
The Situation
• Have a conversation with each other about the girl your son is dating.
The First Line
• "Jeremy was on the front porch kissing that girl of his well past midnight, you know."
Random Subtext 1
• You think your spouse has been paying too much attention to matters outside your marriage.
Random Subtext 2
• You find it ironic that your spouse shows such interest in your son's love life, when he/she hasn't been paying a bit of attention to your own.
I told the students to take ten seconds to choose who would take which character, and to decide who would be writing the first line I’d kindly provided. It didn’t matter which person spoke the first line; it didn’t matter which subtext either character got. (I loved the potential randomness of it. If I were to do it again, I might come up with even more subtexts for each pair, so I’d never know what I was going to get.)
They’d have eight minutes to take turns writing their lines of dialogue down on the sheets of paper they were sharing.
Go.
I sat in place, listening discreetly to the giggles as they played in their little sandboxes. I didn’t really know how successful the exercise might be, as I’d only conjured it up the day before. I deliberately attempted to create scenarios that might lead to squabbling, or polite hostility. There’s rich subtext to be found in situation in which two characters know each other well enough to have accumulated a heavy catalog of the other’s faults, but are compelled by circumstances not to speak of them directly.
But honestly, I had no idea whether these short dialogues would sink or swim. The only thing in which I could take heart was how quickly their pens flew across and covered the sheets of notebook paper.
Eight minutes later, I had them break off their dialogue where it was. I asked each pair to read their conversation aloud to the class. The sisters at the wedding went first. I know for a fact that the Younger Sister who was supposed to be perceived as the choosy one hadn’t read Older Sister’s blue subtext card (“You think your sister is eternally single because she's too picky about guys”), but by some stroke of good fortune the Younger Sister very quickly launched into a launched into a diatribe about the imaginary groom’s faults (“He’s too short, he has no chin, and those freckles!”) that fed right into Older Sister’s unspoken agenda, prompting some tart family bickering that was so naturally written that it sounded as if it had been transcribed from an actual wedding reception.
When they were finished, I waited for the laughter to clear before asking, “What does Older Sister here think about Younger Sister?”
Immediately someone said, “She’s distressed about her lifestyle choices,” and someone else zeroed in a little further: “She obviously thinks her younger sister is too picky about men.”
I told Older Sister to reveal her blue card. It read almost word for word what the last student had suggested. “How about Younger Sister?” I asked the class. “What are her feelings about Older Sister?”
“That she’s too intrusive,” said someone. Another student said, “I think she feels she’s being controlled and bossed around?” I had Younger Sister reveal her blue card.
The woman who had written the Younger Sister lines spoke up. “But wait,” she said, thinking aloud. “I had absolutely no idea what my partner thought about me, but somehow she got me to act as if I was picky and to say exactly what she wanted to hear, when I gave her the list of the groom’s shortcomings. . . .” She thought some more. “I mean, I fed right into her.”
“That’s subtext at work,” I pointed out, nodding vigorously. “Older Sister gave you a prompt that very clearly indicated she expected you to find things wrong with the poor groom, and you obliged her by giving that list. Her character never outright said, ‘Oh lord, I think you’re a persnickety bitch and I’m sure you’ve already got a laundry list of minor things that you’ve decided are this man’s major faults,’ but she clearly expected that from your character—and you obliged by giving it to her. You confirmed her prejudices.”
“And I didn’t know I was supposed to be controlling!” said the woman who had played Older Sister. “She turned me into it! She controlled me and made me controlling!”
I didn’t expect this reaction, but I found it to be a universal theme with the exercise. The students were so busy concentrating on conveying their hidden subtexts that they weren’t really engaging in any detective work about what their partners’ characters secretly thought about them. Yet somehow, in the sisters’ wedding squabbling, or the husband and wife icily and tacitly discussing their marriage through the vehicle of their son’s porch light make-out session, or whatever situation they encountered, everyone seemed to understand that when one character really brings their subtext to an encounter—even subtly—other characters will respond at an instinctive level.
The exercise made clear that everything was as it should be—their readers/listeners were able to discern exactly what information they needed to know about the two characters they created on the spot, while the characters each remained blissfully unaware of what the other really thought of them. They were even somewhat ignorant of how they themselves were behaving in ways that justified the other.
Every character a writer creates, at any given moment, has his or her own hopes and dreams and motivations. To each line of dialogue, they’re bringing entire worlds of experience and emotion. The mildest of declarations, deep inside, can be the throwing down of a gauntlet; a seemingly milquetoast question can be a covert declaration of war.
It’s the writer’s job to know what every character wants and feels, and what wild unknowns they wish to convey—particularly when the characters don’t know for themselves. Without subtext, dialogue is bland. Interchangeable. With it, it’s a writer’s best tool to conveying the individual rich worlds that each character occupies.
Friday, March 11, 2016
Postcards from the Edge: A Writing Exercise
Among the creative calisthenics I’ve used for my writing class is one that Thisbe Nissen provided for the excellent book, Naming the World, and Other Exercises for the Creative Writer. She suggests having students take postcards and, right there on the spot, asking them to imagine a character who then composes a message upon it. It’s an exercise that’s supposed to get students quickly flexing their imaginations, using artifacts from the real world as props.
I liked the idea when I read about it. A couple of years ago, during a summer in Provincetown, I visited a junk shop and stumbled on a trunk of old vintage post cards. I riffled through them and selected those with photos that suggested untold stories. Finally I assembled a couple of dozen. The shop’s proprietor was so pleased that someone was taking a chunk of old postcards off his hands that he gave them to me at a steep discount.
A few months later after class started, I ran the exercise. With no disrespect to Ms. Nissen, the results were a bit of a dud. Oh, I followed her directions and asked the students in my seminar to envision the kind of person who might select their particular postcard. I had them write in the voice of this person. I also followed Nissen’s advice and suggested they swap postcards and reply to them. The idea here was that they’d jump into the thought processes of a second character as they pretended to be the recipient of the missive.
But the postcards the students wrote to each other were largely dull. They were nice. They all started with identical salutations and inquiries about the weather and hopes that all were well, followed by reassurances that they were having a good time in Bakersfield, CA/Plymouth, MI/Provincetown/Colonial Williamsburg/beautiful Bayonne, NJ. The replies were largely as insipid, expressing relief that all was well and urging the original sender to have a good time, and that everyone missed them in Waikiki/Austin, TX/Carowinds/Virginia Beach/Fort Bragg.
I tried to push home a message of “See? A few short minutes and you’ve got two characters and a premise for a story!”, but even a three-year-old could have seen through my false enthusiasm. Those stories wouldn’t have been anything I wanted to read.
This semester I was going to replace the exercise with something—anything—else, but heck. I still had the postcards. Maybe, I thought, I could revamp the exercise into somehow. Make it more interesting. Maybe the writing students envisioned in Naming the World were universally in MFA programs, and not the retirees, young working people, and moms who sign up for my classes. Maybe rather than speeding up the exercise so that the writers were jumping from new character to new character, I should be slowing everything down and let them reflect on what they’d written.
The last seemed a reasonable premise.
So this time around I added a period of meditation, after they’d chosen their picture postcard from the brown paper bag. I had them look at the photographs on front and, over the course of a couple of minutes, consider a number of questions.
Who was the person who might have selected such a card to send to someone? What kind of person—what kind of character—would have picked this particular postcard to send?
I asked them to take a moment to envision the character. Was it male or female? Was it someone contemporary? Someone in the past? Someone who was educated? Or perhaps someone who’d never made it past high school? Was this person a saint or a sinner, or somewhere in between?
I told them to take a moment to imagine why they were writing this postcard, to begin with. Did they pick it from a rack while they were vacationing? Did they send it to someone far away as a reminder of home? Did they find it tucked in a motel Bible? Did they steal it?
Who was the specific person to whom they were writing? Why was the character sending them a postcard rather than a letter? What’s their mood as they write?
I added a few more instructions before I let them begin. This character should not be you, I emphasized. This character does not have to think or behave like you would. The character does not have to be nice. He or she doesn’t have to be pleasant. She can be in a moment of crisis, or elation. The character can be a criminal or a sociopath. He can be an ordinary person who is involved in something extraordinary.
And most of all, I told them, skip the niceties. The greetings. The well-wishing. Your character doesn’t have time for that. Figure out why.
Then I let them write.
Although I gave them the same amount of time to compose their postcards this time as before—five minutes—this time around I asked them to do something different during the exercise’s sharing part. Show us your postcard first, I instructed. Then read us what you wrote, and say nothing more.
To the rest of the class, I said, It’s your job to tell us who this person is, based on the clues you find on this postcard. Imagine you’re a detective, and this is your one piece of evidence. What does every word tell you about the person who wrote it?
The first student read her postcard from Hawaii. It was addressed to B., from P., and contained a message about revisiting Hawaii, where they’d married twenty years before, in an attempt to get over a relationship that had failed after a decade. Though it was only a few sentences, I asked the students, What kind of person is P.?
At first the answers came slowly. They debated back and forth the sex of B. and P. respectively, Who flies to Hawaii on a whim to get over a ten-year-dead relationship?, I wanted to know. It was at this point that the class became excited. A hopeless romantic, they suggested. Someone with her head in the clouds. Someone who wasn’t entirely in touch with reality, who was of a certain affluence, who had a spur-of-the-moment spontaneity that maybe even overwhelmed her common sense.
The class then zeroed in on the line with which the character had signed off—“Don’t show this to your wife!” This woman was very naïve, they reasoned, because after all even the postman could read what she’d said, if he wanted. Perhaps she was even willfully destructive. Maybe she wanted the wife to see the postcard from the ex arrive in the mail, to read the message, and to cause friction between the two.
I let the listeners debate for a while and read all the possible nuances into the scenario before I turned to the woman who’d actually written the fictional postcard. I released her from her silence to tell us how she’d envisioned the character she’d fleshed out in a few sentences. I’d never seen someone so excited to talk in class before. She confirmed that indeed she’d pictured a scatterbrained woman of middle age who’d revisited the site of her wedding on a whim. But she began to spin not only some backstory for the woman—she’d been visiting not just the site of the wedding, but all the spots across the country that had meant something to her during the couple’s courtship—but some of the unrevealed after-story as well: she’d decided to fight to get her ex-husband back.
The students wanted to know if the final sentence had been deliberate relationship sabotage—almost in the same way that fans must badger George R. R. Martin for unwritten Game of Thrones spoilers. “You know, I honestly don’t know!” she exclaimed, and paused. Her eyes were dancing with possibility.
“Do mine next!” one student exclaimed. “It fits perfectly!”
I let her show her card, which was a series of colored patio umbrellas somewhere in California. She read the card aloud—it was from a man who addressed his postcard to ‘Jackie, Darling,’ and peppered her with questions. “Are you startled to hear from me? Are you surprised I’ve made it all the way out to California? Do you want to know why I’m here?” The listeners drilled right into the text to wring every nuance out of it. The guy was obviously controlling, and dominant, and even a little bit scary, maybe. They debated what ‘all the way out to California’ meant—was he from a city on the east coast? Or some podunk town where anyplace in California sounded exotic and wildly sophisticated?
This woman, given the chance at last to speak, loved what she’d heard. She’d envisioned her character as a fast-talking lothario, sure of himself and of his good looks, who simply assumed that no matter how much time had passed since the last time he’d seen one of his conquests, that she’d still be madly head over heels with him. She and the first woman laughed at the notion that perhaps their postcards were the separate halves of the same story.
But they could be, I pointed out. They absolutely could be connected. Or they could be separate worlds of their own. What kind of stories could these two strong personalities generate?
Another woman in the class had crafted a lovely card about a boy in college who was a dreamer, who harbored longing feelings for a girl inappropriate for him; we spoke at length about how we saw him, based on the very few sentences she’d written. Another had written a grimmer postcard about a pilgrimage to a cemetery in Cape Cod. After several minutes of spirited debate, she filled us in with a richly-textured backstory about the character had involved a short-lived marriage, the death of a husband, property in Boston, a woman’s retreat in Arizona, and a late-in-life acceptance of her own lesbianism.
“I think it’s remarkable that you,” I told this woman, and then broadened it to include them all, “that you all started with seven and a half square inches of postcard and five minutes to write on it, and have generated enough imaginative possibility to fill pages and pages and chapters, and even a book’s worth of story.”
They all agreed, eyes shining. I couldn’t have felt any better, or any more excited, about the results. I still get a giddy feeling when I think about it.
The postcard workout flopped the first time, for me, because it never skimmed any deeper than the surface. The second time around, it was uncanny how much depth it brought out—how much wild, raw imagination was at work over the course of only a few minutes. The students confirmed to each other that even a few sentences of their own writing could be incredibly evocative; hearing their words explored and interpreted and wrung of nuance not only validated the bits they’d done right, but opened up vast possibilities for the story’s future.
Five minutes and a postcard, and some careful reflection afterward. That’s all it took for me to end up with a shelf of books I’d want to read.
I liked the idea when I read about it. A couple of years ago, during a summer in Provincetown, I visited a junk shop and stumbled on a trunk of old vintage post cards. I riffled through them and selected those with photos that suggested untold stories. Finally I assembled a couple of dozen. The shop’s proprietor was so pleased that someone was taking a chunk of old postcards off his hands that he gave them to me at a steep discount.
A few months later after class started, I ran the exercise. With no disrespect to Ms. Nissen, the results were a bit of a dud. Oh, I followed her directions and asked the students in my seminar to envision the kind of person who might select their particular postcard. I had them write in the voice of this person. I also followed Nissen’s advice and suggested they swap postcards and reply to them. The idea here was that they’d jump into the thought processes of a second character as they pretended to be the recipient of the missive.
But the postcards the students wrote to each other were largely dull. They were nice. They all started with identical salutations and inquiries about the weather and hopes that all were well, followed by reassurances that they were having a good time in Bakersfield, CA/Plymouth, MI/Provincetown/Colonial Williamsburg/beautiful Bayonne, NJ. The replies were largely as insipid, expressing relief that all was well and urging the original sender to have a good time, and that everyone missed them in Waikiki/Austin, TX/Carowinds/Virginia Beach/Fort Bragg.
I tried to push home a message of “See? A few short minutes and you’ve got two characters and a premise for a story!”, but even a three-year-old could have seen through my false enthusiasm. Those stories wouldn’t have been anything I wanted to read.
This semester I was going to replace the exercise with something—anything—else, but heck. I still had the postcards. Maybe, I thought, I could revamp the exercise into somehow. Make it more interesting. Maybe the writing students envisioned in Naming the World were universally in MFA programs, and not the retirees, young working people, and moms who sign up for my classes. Maybe rather than speeding up the exercise so that the writers were jumping from new character to new character, I should be slowing everything down and let them reflect on what they’d written.
The last seemed a reasonable premise.
So this time around I added a period of meditation, after they’d chosen their picture postcard from the brown paper bag. I had them look at the photographs on front and, over the course of a couple of minutes, consider a number of questions.
Who was the person who might have selected such a card to send to someone? What kind of person—what kind of character—would have picked this particular postcard to send?
I asked them to take a moment to envision the character. Was it male or female? Was it someone contemporary? Someone in the past? Someone who was educated? Or perhaps someone who’d never made it past high school? Was this person a saint or a sinner, or somewhere in between?
I told them to take a moment to imagine why they were writing this postcard, to begin with. Did they pick it from a rack while they were vacationing? Did they send it to someone far away as a reminder of home? Did they find it tucked in a motel Bible? Did they steal it?
Who was the specific person to whom they were writing? Why was the character sending them a postcard rather than a letter? What’s their mood as they write?
I added a few more instructions before I let them begin. This character should not be you, I emphasized. This character does not have to think or behave like you would. The character does not have to be nice. He or she doesn’t have to be pleasant. She can be in a moment of crisis, or elation. The character can be a criminal or a sociopath. He can be an ordinary person who is involved in something extraordinary.
And most of all, I told them, skip the niceties. The greetings. The well-wishing. Your character doesn’t have time for that. Figure out why.
Then I let them write.
Although I gave them the same amount of time to compose their postcards this time as before—five minutes—this time around I asked them to do something different during the exercise’s sharing part. Show us your postcard first, I instructed. Then read us what you wrote, and say nothing more.
To the rest of the class, I said, It’s your job to tell us who this person is, based on the clues you find on this postcard. Imagine you’re a detective, and this is your one piece of evidence. What does every word tell you about the person who wrote it?
The first student read her postcard from Hawaii. It was addressed to B., from P., and contained a message about revisiting Hawaii, where they’d married twenty years before, in an attempt to get over a relationship that had failed after a decade. Though it was only a few sentences, I asked the students, What kind of person is P.?
At first the answers came slowly. They debated back and forth the sex of B. and P. respectively, Who flies to Hawaii on a whim to get over a ten-year-dead relationship?, I wanted to know. It was at this point that the class became excited. A hopeless romantic, they suggested. Someone with her head in the clouds. Someone who wasn’t entirely in touch with reality, who was of a certain affluence, who had a spur-of-the-moment spontaneity that maybe even overwhelmed her common sense.
The class then zeroed in on the line with which the character had signed off—“Don’t show this to your wife!” This woman was very naïve, they reasoned, because after all even the postman could read what she’d said, if he wanted. Perhaps she was even willfully destructive. Maybe she wanted the wife to see the postcard from the ex arrive in the mail, to read the message, and to cause friction between the two.
I let the listeners debate for a while and read all the possible nuances into the scenario before I turned to the woman who’d actually written the fictional postcard. I released her from her silence to tell us how she’d envisioned the character she’d fleshed out in a few sentences. I’d never seen someone so excited to talk in class before. She confirmed that indeed she’d pictured a scatterbrained woman of middle age who’d revisited the site of her wedding on a whim. But she began to spin not only some backstory for the woman—she’d been visiting not just the site of the wedding, but all the spots across the country that had meant something to her during the couple’s courtship—but some of the unrevealed after-story as well: she’d decided to fight to get her ex-husband back.
The students wanted to know if the final sentence had been deliberate relationship sabotage—almost in the same way that fans must badger George R. R. Martin for unwritten Game of Thrones spoilers. “You know, I honestly don’t know!” she exclaimed, and paused. Her eyes were dancing with possibility.
“Do mine next!” one student exclaimed. “It fits perfectly!”
I let her show her card, which was a series of colored patio umbrellas somewhere in California. She read the card aloud—it was from a man who addressed his postcard to ‘Jackie, Darling,’ and peppered her with questions. “Are you startled to hear from me? Are you surprised I’ve made it all the way out to California? Do you want to know why I’m here?” The listeners drilled right into the text to wring every nuance out of it. The guy was obviously controlling, and dominant, and even a little bit scary, maybe. They debated what ‘all the way out to California’ meant—was he from a city on the east coast? Or some podunk town where anyplace in California sounded exotic and wildly sophisticated?
This woman, given the chance at last to speak, loved what she’d heard. She’d envisioned her character as a fast-talking lothario, sure of himself and of his good looks, who simply assumed that no matter how much time had passed since the last time he’d seen one of his conquests, that she’d still be madly head over heels with him. She and the first woman laughed at the notion that perhaps their postcards were the separate halves of the same story.
But they could be, I pointed out. They absolutely could be connected. Or they could be separate worlds of their own. What kind of stories could these two strong personalities generate?
Another woman in the class had crafted a lovely card about a boy in college who was a dreamer, who harbored longing feelings for a girl inappropriate for him; we spoke at length about how we saw him, based on the very few sentences she’d written. Another had written a grimmer postcard about a pilgrimage to a cemetery in Cape Cod. After several minutes of spirited debate, she filled us in with a richly-textured backstory about the character had involved a short-lived marriage, the death of a husband, property in Boston, a woman’s retreat in Arizona, and a late-in-life acceptance of her own lesbianism.
“I think it’s remarkable that you,” I told this woman, and then broadened it to include them all, “that you all started with seven and a half square inches of postcard and five minutes to write on it, and have generated enough imaginative possibility to fill pages and pages and chapters, and even a book’s worth of story.”
They all agreed, eyes shining. I couldn’t have felt any better, or any more excited, about the results. I still get a giddy feeling when I think about it.
The postcard workout flopped the first time, for me, because it never skimmed any deeper than the surface. The second time around, it was uncanny how much depth it brought out—how much wild, raw imagination was at work over the course of only a few minutes. The students confirmed to each other that even a few sentences of their own writing could be incredibly evocative; hearing their words explored and interpreted and wrung of nuance not only validated the bits they’d done right, but opened up vast possibilities for the story’s future.
Five minutes and a postcard, and some careful reflection afterward. That’s all it took for me to end up with a shelf of books I’d want to read.
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